06 April 2018

Hunting and Fishing Compettion


In Room 5 we have written about  Hunting and Fishing. I went to the Competition. It was really fun so we got to write this piece of writing.  We have been learning to  describe. We had to write in vivid words.


Ambling to the Hunting and Fishing Competition I spot slippery and slimy black eels wriggling in a bin of water on the ground.  I ask the people that are weighing the eels if I can pick the black eel up to put it into the bin to be with the other eels for company. I have to put my hand over the eels mouth so it doesn’t bite me. As I pick an eel up it goes to bite me so I quickly put my hand over its mouth. Then I slowly put it in to the bin with the others and watch it slither around.They are really big and slippery. When  I have enough looking at the deer I go back to the eels. There are more than before. I see a big big eel so I run away because it is so big. An hour later I see some people looking at the eels so I go over and show them my eel. To get a better look at the eel I pick it up. The people are scared and jump.

2 comments:

  1. Haylee, I think you've done a really great job of your descriptive writing. I can picture exactly how those visitors might've felt looking at you holding your eel, well done! I would've jumped as well, if I'd been in their shoes.

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  2. Hi Haylee, you've included so much detail about the eels. It's clear from your description that you know a lot about eels - what they look like, feel like and how to handle them.

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